Can you read this song i wrote for this boy and tell me what you think?

wow. umm. the first sentence could start with I not And. Im not trying to be mean but i write songs all summer, and im giving constructive critisism. Ok, how about cutting the last stanza in half. Keep the most important parts in the last stanza. I think "ill be like a conjoined twin" could be cut. (if you want). other than that, its near perfect. EXCEPT! dont just sing it to him, i would tell him about the song then gauge his reaction. Example: He gets wierded out (no offence) or wants to see it.good luck